Look at the following short outline for an explanatory essay. How would you improve it?


Claim: The Aztec Empire achieved greater developments in government, society, and culture than the Inca Empire.


I. Introduction

II. Aztec Empire

APolitical Developments

BSocial Developments

CCultural Developments

III. Conclusion

AAdd a section about the Inca Empire.

BUse more colorful language.

CIntroduce new arguments in the conclusion.

DHave the conclusion immediately following the introduction